A man photographs a swan

[spassig123]

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M11-P, 21 mmm, crop.

Nice weather here in Denmark, Bornholm. Criticism gladly, (especially what and how to do it better/ differently).

Jochen

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[stuny]

Lovely

[David Cantor]

I think that I would crop out the photographer and lose some of the foreground to balance the composition. 
 

David

Edited August 14, 2024 by David Cantor

[spassig123]

vor 26 Minuten schrieb David Cantor:

I think that I would crop out the photographer and lose some of the foreground to balance the composition. 
 

David

Thanks David for Your suggestion;-)

The wife and the swan.

Jochen

[David Cantor]

2 hours ago, spassig123 said:

Thanks David for Your suggestion;-)

The wife and the swan.

Jochen

Dear Jochen, my reasoning is that it could be that the photographer is superfluous to the image and maybe a distraction from the swan and the woman. The swan would also appear as a greater part of the picture.

[spassig123]

vor 33 Minuten schrieb David Cantor:

Dear Jochen, my reasoning is that it could be that the photographer is superfluous to the image and maybe a distraction from the swan and the woman. The swan would also appear as a greater part of the picture.

Hello David

OK.

I have an other crop

Jochen

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[otto.f]

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If you just cut off the photographer the composition will become out of balance in my view, unless you have more space at the left in the original framing.

[jaapv]

1 hour ago, David Cantor said:

Dear Jochen, my reasoning is that it could be that the photographer is superfluous to the image and maybe a distraction from the swan and the woman. The swan would also appear as a greater part of the picture.

The photographer is the whole point of the image. I like the storytelling

[David Cantor]

40 minutes ago, jaapv said:

The photographer is the whole point of the image.

Why? 

[David Cantor]

54 minutes ago, spassig123 said:

Hello David

OK.

I have an other crop

Jochen

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I prefer this version.

[jaapv]

19 minutes ago, David Cantor said:

Why? 

Because it tells us about the relationship between the man and the woman.

[David Cantor]

1 minute ago, jaapv said:

Because it tells us about the relationship between the man and the woman.

Disagree, it’s about the relationship between the woman and the swan. I’m all in favour of diversity of opinion.

[Biotar]

I would cut off the swans and it would increase the tension immensely.

[jaapv]

Maybe, but it does explain the subject of their interest. The panorama crop is a good idea, but otherwise it is a good photograph as it is and well seen. IMO of course. 

[fotografr]

The swan is too small in the frame to be the central focus of the image, so the whole story is the swan being photographed by the man while the woman (wife?) observes. If the photographer is cropped out, it's just a relatively boring photo of a woman looking at a swan. 

If other lenses were available, I think a better image would have been made by getting behind the photographer and using a longer lens, possible not even including the woman in the frame.

Edited August 15, 2024 by fotografr

[spassig123]

Thanks for discussion.

I bought the M11-P with three lenses recently. It's a lot of fun to shoot with, especially this scene. Neither of them noticed me until afterwards.

Jochen

[otto.f]

If I’m not mistaken, after all the opinions here, we did not see the original uncropped 21mm image yet. And since photography is a highly intuitive thing, the first impulse to shoot deserves some respect and consideration. 

Edited August 15, 2024 by otto.f